2017.06.20 Tuesday

#175 Judging people by appearance

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    こんにちは!

    今月紹介させていただくessayは "Judging people by appearance" です。

    是非が分かれるtopicですが、皆様はいかがですか?

     

    I don’t think judging people by appearance is bad.

    I think that appearance shows our mindsets. We automatically express ourselves by using clothes, attitude, face expression etc.

    In my case, my first impression of someone doesn’t change only when I like the person at first. I may judge people by atmosphere, their clothes, face expression, etc.

    In society, manner is important, too. That means many people tend to judge other people by their appearances.

    At the same time, we control our appearances.

    I’d like to be a person who pulls off various styles. I think it’s effective in business life. And if I can do that, my life can be more colorful.

     

    教師より

    You have a good paragraph structure but I recommend you to state your opinion once again in the conclusion paragraph.

    You give good reasons to support your opinion and I agree with most of them.

    Of course this is a personal opinion and I’m a true believer of first impressions but sometimes “appearances are deceptive.” So, a person can look like a very good person but actually he can be a criminal. On the other hand, a homeless person can look very dirty and dangerous but he/she can turn out to be a very kind and sweet person. But still, we should pay attention to how we look like and use it in our advantage like you said.

    2017.05.20 Saturday

    #174 TOEFL Writing 1

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      こんにちは!

       

      本日紹介させていただくのは、TOEFLテストに向けlessonを受講されている生徒様のessayです。

      WILLのTOEFL Writingでは、TOEFLテストで求められるポイントを分類して、教師が丁寧に添削・採点しています。

       

      日本語の文章でも、順序立てて論理的に書くというのは大変です。これを時間内に英語で書くとなると、やはりたくさんの練習が必要ですね。

       

       

      "What is a very important skill a person should learn

      in order to successful in the world today? Choose one skill."

       

      In my opinion, what we have to learn is how to be polite.

      Although, some people would ask, “what is propriety?” I would like to raise three most important things to be appreciated as a “modest person,”.

      First, greetings. Second, be very responsible with your words, and third, do not do what you do not want done to you.

       

      Greeting is very important to maintain the relationship between your family, colleagues and friends. According to my mother, people who cannot greet properly are way worthless than someone who can greet. This statement sounds very extreme, though, it is true.

      When I said “Hi” to my ex-classmate, she ignored me and went into the classroom. I have never forgotten how I felt on that day, I felt unpleasant irritation and frustration, totally different from the stress from too much assignments examinations. I had been hating her since the day she ignored me. Therefore, a greeting has a great effect on someone and is the most basic way to be polite.

       

      Be very careful what you say. If you said something rude to your family or your friends, and you have forgotten, you will be in trouble. Even if you forgot what you referred about to your friend, he or she hardly forgets about this. Humans are more vindictive than the elephants, so we have to be very responsible for what have we spoken in order to retain a good relationship to the people around you.

       

      Do not do something you do not want done to you. If you have been treated badly, what would you think? You would feel frustrate, annoyed or lamented. When you did that to other people, you have hurt some people consciously or unconsciously. Thus you have to think about how you want to be treated and act accordingly.

       

      In conclusion, as long as we are polite, we can make a good relationship with the people around us.

       

       

      教師より

      Our conduct and polite manner is something we should all learn and maintain.

       

      I think regardless of the reactions of other people, if we maintain a good level of propriety, it speaks volumes about our personality.

       

      I concur that we should treat others how we would like to be treated. A polite character really helps form close relations with other people. Without this skill, co-operation would cease to exist.

      2017.04.09 Sunday

      #173 Is the taboo on recreational drugs justified?

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        こんにちは!

         

        桜も満開に咲き誇り、すっかり春らしい陽気になりましたね。

        道を歩いていると、新しい制服やスーツに身を包んで歩く人々につい目が留まります。

        私は4月になっても特に変化のない生活ですが、何だかソワソワとする季節ですニコッ

         

         

        "Is the taboo on recreational drugs justified?"

        Recreational drugs mean the substances used for enjoyment rather than for a medical purpose. The term is generally applied to alcohol, barbiturates, amphetamines, THC, PCP, cocaine, and heroin but also includes caffeine in coffee and cola beverages.

         

        As this word covers a large area, I’d say No, on the illicit drugs. They must not be justified because they create a high level of dependency and very often they lead to disaster or crime.

        On the other hand, I’d say Yes, in the case of coffee and cola, for being quite harmless to other people.

         

        Recreational drugs are the matter for which we shouldn’t depend on as a personal choice. I believe that there is no right to keep them in society. In Japan, illegal herbs (or dangerous drugs) have been increasing since the number of arrests until 2014. There were many serious traffic accidents caused by users of such drugs.

         

        As the regulations became tightened dangerous drugs are mostly extinct and the number of arrests with THC developed again 2015, the Metropolitan Police Department reported .

        In criminal cases, it indicated that cases of theft are reduced by 10% compared with the previous year, 11.5% reduced for the number of murder cases, setting the lowest record after World War . On the contrary, drug crime tends to increase.

         

        There is no room for justifying recreational drugs that are harmful. nothing justifies illegal drugs, even though some claim that they have a right to enjoy themselves. We should not make excuses for using drugs just to entertain us though it’s nothing new and there has to be regulations in place.

         

        教師より

        You’ve made some valid reasons why recreational drugs should be restricted. Especially when they are to the detriment of the health care industry and people in society.

         

        It’s quite sad but not surprising that the distribution of drugs and violent crime occur in poor urban areas of some cities in North and South America.

         

        It is said that when the black panther movement flourished in the U.S the C.I.A was involved in supplying drugs to those areas to subdue the black population. Freedom of people and anti war sentiments are a deterrent after all.

         

        Some people say Marijuana can be used for medical purposes or recreationally. However that may give reason to use other drugs and cause a lot of health problem even though statistically the users are less prone to violence.

         

        I must admit, I really like coffee so that’s quite difficult to give up.

        2017.03.02 Thursday

        #172 Japan secrecy law

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          こんにちは!

           

          3月に突入し、春の気配を感じる日も増えて来ましたね。

          先日は満開の河津桜が綺麗に咲いているのを見ました。

           

          来月から進学や就職、転職など、新生活をスタートされる方もいらっしゃるかと思います。

          何かとバタバタとする時期ですが、お身体に気をつけてお過ごしください!

           

           

          "Japan secrecy law"

          A new problem has occurred thick and fast with the state secrecy law.

          Our personal information should be protected but on the other hand, it has an advantage, if we use it properly.

           

          Nowadays personal information is being watched with keen interest because the government decided to introduce the national ID number system alias my number system.

          Japanese citizens are assigned 12 figure number. It is a system that controls information concerned about social security, taxes, and medical insurance.

           

          It aims to make office work run efficiently. Public service is supposed to take a long time usually, I hope it becomes faster but many people are concerned about the leaking of information and the misuse of privacy.

          My number system has just begun. The problems will happen in the future, but I hope it becomes a good system.

           

           

          教師より

          This was a good essay. You’ve stated the reasons for concern that many Japanese citizens have about the ‘my number system’.

          It’s rather disconcerting that the NSA (National Security Agency) and the Japanese government can search for information about any citizen they like.

          Yet as we have seen, the Japanese government has concealed a lot of information from Japanese citizens.

           

          Ownership of media is a draconian tactic and its an attempt to indoctrinate and pacify the population.

          It also allows the government to freely do what they want without a public referendum or consensus. It’s not surprising that some people really dislike the Abe regime.

           

          I hope that everyone’s privacy will be protected and that Japan has a better government in future.

          2017.02.04 Saturday

          #171 The advantages and disadvantages of computers.

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            こんにちは!
            かなり遅くなってしまいましたが、2017年も
            どうぞよろしくお願いいたします!

             

            それでは、早速essayを紹介させていただきます!

             

            "The Advantages and disadvantages of computers"

            My generation is the first generation that used computers and we have been familiar with them since our childhood.

            Of course, most of our first computers were video game consoles. However, it is probably true that we didn’t hesitate too much to use unknown computer-based machines compared to the previous generation.

             

            The biggest advantage of computers are their calculation speed and correctness. Also, computers don’t complain, if they work 24 hours, 365 days without having rests. Therefore, many jobs that use calculations are replaced by computers and people come to work more efficiently. In fact, hand calculations used to be necessary only in my school life.

             

            On the other hand, one of the disadvantages of computers in that they’re too inflexible instead of being correct. They stop working, if there is an insignificant mistake. It sometimes causes big trouble like failure of launching a rocket because of the wrong digit in its computer program.

             

            My thought of another disadvantage of computers is they are designed by human beings. That means computers can’t surpass human beings. For instance, artificial intelligence is today’s key technology, but its process of thinking is made by human beings. I still don’t rely on an automatic car controlled by A.I., because there is no complete human being in the world.

             

            教師より

            Your essay contained some valid reasons on the topic.

            As you wrote in your essay, computers have helped increase productivity, the storage of information and improved the accessibility of communication.

             

            Although computers have many advantages it may take time before they can be trusted to work autonomously without being monitored by humans.

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